Adoration for the Craft:
Starring a Writer and a Rupophobic
Table of Contents:
3 Adoration for the Craft
6 Introductions: The Dreaded First Sentence
7 Patrick Miles III vs. The Scuff
9 Patrick Miles III vs. The Scuff Rewrite
14 Patrick Miles III vs. Morning Rituals
15 Conclusion/Link to Documentary
16 Work Cited/Consulted
Adoration for the Craft
In third grade, my teacher gave me a journal and inscribed on the inside cover, “Never stop writing.” I wrote a mystery short story in fifth grade that my teacher claimed reminded her of Mary Higgins Clark. By seventh grade, I was writing every day and was about sixty pages into my first novel. I spent hours a week writing until I couldn’t any longer and always showed it to all my eager friends. Between the enthusiastic compliments and the ability to fabricate these stories using my imagination, I adored writing. Then I reached junior year of high school. I decided to show my English teacher (I’ll refer to him as “Mr. P”) a novel I was working on at the time. When I asked him what he thought, he said, “so you left the two characters off in that ditch, right?” And that was it. No suggestions, no compliments, just that indifferent statement. After that, I barely wrote for about two years and never once asked anyone to read my work.
At the end of my freshmen year in college, I realized I still had to take an English Composition class, which meant I would probably have to share my creative writing again. That, paired with the possibility of the creative writing class, meant I would have to reapproach something that once was so familiar to me. It frightened me, but I seized the challenge. Besides, not every professor or teacher could be a Mr. P.
On the first day of Professor Torgerson’s class, I discovered that I would have to be writing constantly—and for the public! Not only would my professor read and critique my work, but my classmates would, as well. We made groups within our class, shared our writing, and reviewed each other’s work. Professor Torgerson, who radiated enthusiasm for the craft, paired with my interested class mates began to help me diminish my fears.
We had to choose a specific topic that we would work on all semester; I chose fiction writing. If I could accomplish overcoming the fear of writing that Mr. P imprinted, then I would have a successful semester. However, simply writing fiction wouldn’t be enough; I wanted to read it, as well. I decided to examine each book I read and figure out how they succeeded and how they faltered. However, I knew I couldn’t just jump into this; I needed an introduction to the topic, a hook, just as every story requires.
I started by examining famous first lines from a few different novels: Fight Club by Chuck Palahniuk, Catch 22 by Joseph Heller, and Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone by J.K. Rowling. Why were these simple sentences so enthralling that they entranced the reader to continue? After comparing the first sentence to the rest of the novel, I came to the conclusion that the introduction was as simple as introducing the story. However, it must be approached with caution. A good writer won’t reveal too much, but provide just enough to lead the reader on. The first line of Rowling’s novel is, “Mr. and Mrs. Dursley, of number four Private Driver, were proud to say that they were perfectly normal, thank you very much” (Rowling, 1). As every Harry Potter fan knows, the Dursley’s are, in fact, not normal because their nephew is a wizard. Rowling’s matter of fact tone reeks of sarcasm. The “thank you very much,” is what really gives it away. Rowling hints that the Dursley’s are not normal, but they wish to be. It’s a great introduction to their characters and provides the idea that something odd will occur. Of course, the reader has to know what, so they continue on.
Along with examining several famous introductions, I decided to read first person narratives so that I could study how other writers took on the challenge. The first book I picked up was Stephen King’s On Writing. While this is a memoir, instead of fiction, King’s enthralling and entertaining narrative voice winded up teaching me more than I could ask for. With the variety of jokes, crude language, and sincere advice, King’s memoir became the foundations for my semester’s work. He provided memorable quotes, like “The road to Hell is paved with adverbs” (King, 118), and fantastic advice. If a verb doesn’t portray the meaning as well as the writer hoped, try to find a different verb instead of scouring for adverbs. After all, actions speak louder than descriptions. He also discussed something which no one cared to mention before: Writing is hard. To find out that a famous, successful writer felt such a way was almost relieving. I find myself faced with writer’s block and can’t figure out how to approach a conclusion that I had in mind. Sometimes, my writers block consumes any inspiration and suddenly, I have to force myself to write only a few sentences. King showed me that I wasn’t the only one.
King provided me with the inspiration to dive into what I wanted to do and endeavor to accomplish my goals. However, I still had to figure out exactly what type of story I wanted to tell and whether I wanted to create several, or follow one character. I decided to create a character using a hundred character development questions. Patrick Miles III, a rich college student from Texas, was born. Not only is he petrified of getting dirty, but he looks down on everyone without realizing how pretentious he actually is. Besides conquering my fear of sharing my work, I decided to take on the challenge of writing in first person. Normally, my work is third person because, let’s face it, an omniscient narrator is so much more simple than capturing a character’s voice and keeping it consistent throughout the story. I decided that if I could practice first person, plus get some helpful advice (unlike Mr. P’s simple remark), I might improve my skills. My two goals by the end of the semester became to conquer my fear of showing my work and to improve my first person narrative craft.
After writing a few posts about Patrick, my group met for the first time. We each read our posts allowed and when it was my turn, I had to ignore the nausea erupting in my stomach. Bracing myself for the worst, I began to read Patrick’s story out loud. To my complete surprise, they loved it. Suddenly, my ideas of Mr. P transformed from a well-respected teacher to someone who I wouldn’t care whether he read my work or not. Mr. P was not my “ideal reader,” which is a term King uses. It just means the specific person the writer is striving to please through his/her work. For years, Mr. P’s words echoed through my head and made me feel inadequate. King made me realize that feedback isn’t always important, especially if it comes from an untrustworthy source. Mr. P will never be my ideal reader, and now I realize that. I decided that if the feedback wasn’t helpful in any way, I would take the critics’ too harsh opinions into mind, but not let it get to me. Besides, if I was happy with something I wrote, and my “ideal reader” was happy, as my peers in the group were, why should I let a lousy comment bring me down?
Just like that, my confidence in my writing boosted up enormously. I glanced back at my original stories written through Patrick’s perspective and I decided to re-write them for myself. I produced an introduction with almost four thousand words, far beyond the first few sections I had written. The best part was that I actually liked what I wrote. Even through his odd quirks, Patrick became a lovable and interesting character, one who I wanted to work on. It’s funny what a bit of confidence can produce.
Mr. P suffocated me, preventing me from doing what I adored most in my life. It may seem silly that I let a single sentence effect me so greatly, but I see that now. Even if I may not be the next Bronte or Rowling, I should never have felt inadequate for something I love to do. I guess the notion that facing your fears to subdue them is true. With King’s words, my group’s support, and my new found confidence aside, the one thing that will always keep me going is my love for the craft. And no amount of iciness, whether it be from Mr. P or anyone, will conquer that.
Introductions:The Dreaded First Sentence
One moment, my fingers dance across the keyboard, and the next, I click the backspace until I’m, once again, faced with a blank screen. Why is beginning a novel such a challenge? The ideas are bubbling ferociously in my imagination, just waiting to pour out onto the paper, but there’s a huge road block: The first sentence.
For me, at least, one of the most difficult steps in starting a novel is writing the introduction sentence. Besides the title, it’s one of the first things the reader will encounter in the novel. It has to hook their attention and enthrall them to the point that they want to read on. It shouldn’t be so difficult to create an epic, interesting sentence right? Wrong. Since I’ve been writing, I discovered it requires skill and a ton of patience. If you’re like me, you’ll throw out your first fifty and, if you’re lucky, somewhat like the fifty-first, then delete it anyway. So what does it take to create this perfect, enticing first sentence?
The first sentence holds a lot of responsibility and, as an amateur, I can’t exactly say what it should contain. Every good novel tantalizes the reader until they need more. The introductory sentence is just the first glance, the first graze, the first kiss. If it falters, the novel loses it’s temptation and is tossed aside. It must pulse with energy and life, leaving the reader puzzled and feverish. The reader should always question what he/she is about to read, but the question should never be, “am I going to enjoy this book?” And, like every great sentence, it should resonate subtly, yet elegantly with the rest of the novel.
One of the best first sentences I’ve encountered is actually from Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone: “Mr. and Mrs. Dursley, of number four, Private Drive, were proud to say they were perfectly normal, thank you very much” (Rowling, 1). Not only does the reader get insight about the Dursleys, but Rowling hints that something is actually, in fact, not normal with the family. The ‘thank you very much’ gives off a defensive tone, as if they have something to hide or have been accused of being quite abnormal.
In the case of Joseph Heller’s novel, Catch 22, Heller follows a completely different route: “It was love at first sight” (Heller, 1). Not only are no characters introduced, but the reader is left with more questions than before they picked up the book. Do two characters fall in love? Where do they meet? The reader continues, thirsting for answers.
So, what makes a first sentence a keeper? Is it the introduction to characters and a bit of background without revealing too much? Or could it be an odd statement which maroons the reader to the point that they have to read on to liberate themselves? Maybe I’ve spent too much time thinking about the first sentence, but let me ask you a question: Which would novel would you rather read?:
“Tyler gets me a job as a waiter, after that Tyler’s pushing a gun in my mouth and saying, the first step to eternal life is you have to die” (Palahniuk, 1).
Or, “Sally Benton was a 17 year old girl with pretty blond hair and very little friends.”
The latter, right?—okay, that’s a joke, but is the choice a challenging one to make? I sure hope not. Palahniuk’s introduction puzzles the reader beyond belief and, when I first picked up Fight Club, I had to know what happened next. The second choice, however, may reveal too many details about the character. Do you really want to know what happens to Sally Benton? Because I certainly don’t. However, with a simple tweak, Sally Benton can become a bit more interesting.
“Sally Benton bit her lip as the dreadful lunch bell rang.” Now, I know it’s not a masterpiece, but questions rise up. Who is Sally Benton and why doesn’t she seem to want to go to lunch? I would definitely be more willing to continue reading this sentence then the original one.
It’s our responsibilities as writers to devote all our knowledge and education to this one sentence. The first sentence holds the weight of the novel on it’s shoulders. A weak first sentence may imply a weak novel, and no one, the reader or the writer, wants that.
And, of course, every great introduction must be paired with an epic, thought-provoking conclusion, but I haven’t reached that far yet…
After reading King a bit and answering the 100 character development questions, I dove right into Patrick Miles III’s story. This was the first chapter I posted on my blog. Later on, there will be a re-write of this. I put the original and the re-write together to show how I progressed simply because I gained a bit of confidence.
Patrick Miles III vs. The Scuff
I notice the scuff marks painted across my new dorm walls before anything else; not the room’s prison size, or the thin mattress, or even the horrible view, but the stains ruining the white walls. The black lines streaked across the wall aren’t my main concern, though: it’s the two shoe prints. Someone must have pulled their dirty boots off and slammed them against the wall to create such vivid marks. Besides the boot print, there are thirteen other scuffs. Too bad for them, though. I brought White Out just to fix any impurities on my walls. They won’t get the best of me.
My mother pushes passed me, a bit too excited to set up. Empty rooms are like blank canvases to her. But as soon as she gets a good, long look at the room, her eyebrows furrow. My mother’s the kind of woman who focuses constantly on appearance. If something looks out of place, she has to fix it or it gnaws at her. Our house always sparkles from the inside out. She puts a lot of money and effort into it. Well, not effort, unless you count hiring workers as ‘effort’.
“Oh,” she gasps softly. “Well, isn’t this nice? It’s nice, sweetie, right? You have a lovely view of—what exactly is that?”
“I think it’s the lot behind the dining hall.”
“Right, of course. It’s lovely.”
We both watch silently as a man in an apron dumps brown slosh into a dumpster, splashing it on the piles of garbage. Some splatters against the lid.
When he waddles back inside, I mutter, “Maybe I’ll just keep the blinds down.”
“Don’t worry about it, Patrick, darlin’. We’ll make this place good as new. And at least you get a nice view of the sky.”
Maybe it’s all those self-motivation classes she attends, or maybe she’s actually losing her mind, but somehow she manages to extract optimism from every situation. Believe me, it’s exhausting to listen to. When my mother discovered that Mason, my twin brother, crashed into a truck (which cost my father thousands of dollars for our car’s and the truck’s repairs), she just smiled calmly and proclaimed she was happy no one was hurt. Then, whenever my father rough it up at the table, she hushed him and said Mason was a growing boy and it was just a part of life. My father would just glower at her, rubbing the edge of his eyebrow with his pinky.
I glance over my shoulder at him. He lowers his eyes steadily, locking them onto mine. A week before, he bet that I wouldn’t last two weeks in the dorm. I shrugged the remark off, at first. But this room…Besides the scuffs ruining the walls, gunk is splattered across the floor and marks cover the desk. Someone had carved, ‘Eat me,’ in huge letters across the wood. Suddenly, backing out doesn’t seem too bad. I could go home, curl in my bed, and finally start Pound’s Cantos. I’ll never have to think about this horrid place again.
“Wow, you’re livin’ the dream.” Mason suddenly smacks his hand on my back, sending waves of pain down my spine. “You regrettin’ this yet?”
“No,” I lie. Mason grins maliciously at me. He always knows when something unsettles me, and my forced grin isn’t helping my case.
Alright, I’ll admit my expectations might have been a bit too high. After all, I lived in ‘Miles Manor’ my entire life. That sounds awful, doesn’t it? A gold plaque sits right on our stone fence, reminding its readers just how wealthy we are. And I know what you’re thinking–I would believe I’m spoiled and pretentious, too. But I’m not.
“Can y’all get out of my way?” my father suddenly chimes from behind me. We immediately scoot over, allowing him to pass. Patrick Miles II is not a man you want to mess with. He stands at six foot five and can probably fit both Mason and I on one shoulder. A gray, bushy mustache covers the top of his lips and, whenever he speaks, it dances along with the rhythm of his voice. And, like all typical wealthy Texan, he has a five hundred dollar cowboy hat settled on the top of his balding head.
Patrick Miles II has run Miles Oil Co., for nearly twenty-seven years. He intends for me to take over the family business, soon. That’s why he so generously granted me the name Patrick Miles III. And yes, granted is the correct term (at least in his opinion). My name is his gift to me. Here, son, instead of buying you one of those stupid baby boy caps to keep your little baby skull warm, I’m just gonna go ahead and put Patrick Miles III on your birth certificate. You’ll thank me later.
Of course, it also implies I can’t choose my future; my father created a path for me, and if I don’t follow it, I’ll be cut off from the family money. Thanks, dad. I would’ve preferred the cap.
Being wealthy should be a privilege, but it’s quite tedious. Originally, my father laughed when I asked to attend Palixton University, one of the most prestigious universities in Texas. They accepted me and even granted me a scholarship, but all he did was lean back in his chair and laugh until he turned red. Maybe growing up rich infected my father to the point that he couldn’t grasp the concept of living outside of his shelter to obtain an education. He doesn’t appreciate learning, but I’m not like him. I swear I’m different. All I want is to do is devour more knowledge about life and the world before I’m trapped behind my father’s desk. By then I’ll just watch huge men mine oil, while listening to employees complain about customers complaining, then dealing with customers complaining that employees aren’t understanding their complaints. Sounds like my ideal future.
I scratch my eyebrow casually, examining the room once again. With my mother’s touch, it may not be so bad. Another stain catches my eye. Yeah–I’ll be just fine. I promise.
After writing a few more posts, I decided to go back and rewrite the whole story. There are quite a few more posts and chapters after these two, but these were the best out of all.
Patrick Miles III vs. The Scuff (Rewrite)
College: the time when stupid teenagers become stupid adults, and all the rest of us get a front row seat to the show. Even Palixton University, one of the most prestigious universities in Texas, has its circle of idiots. What’s the point of college if you don’t want to learn anything? Obtaining knowledge should be a form of entertainment, but it’s not. Instead, we become zombified versions of ourselves, engrossed in watching television, binge drinking, and gossiping.
I thought college would be different. But haven’t we all made incorrect assumptions at one point? My name is Patrick Miles III and I don’t think I’ll ever understand everything and anything. I watched the world through a polished stain-glass window at Miles Manor in Gladewater, Texas. But I guess that’s what happens when you’ve been sheltered your entire life: everything outside of your original life seems surreal. You learn something. Not just about the world, but about yourself. And sometimes realizations are incomprehensible.
My first year of college, when I finally stepped into the real world, I had this ephiphany. It wasn’t as pretty as I had hoped. On the first day, someone tapped a tiny hammer in my stain-glass window, cracking it. Sure, it was a small crack, but I noticed it.
I noticed the scuffs that stained the white walls in my new dorm on my first day at Palixton. I counted thirteen in total. Thirteen stains and one giant boot print planted on the wall above my bed. I had prepared myself for a flawed room, so it shouldn’t have bothered me.
Besides my twin brother, Mason, I would be the first Miles to attend college. It was a bit nerve wracking, and my father laughed when I told him I wanted to go, but it’s all I ever dreamed about: Attending college and learning. The possibilities seemed endless, although I knew where I would turn up after college: sitting behind my father’s desk, watching over the Patrick Miles Oil Co.. That’s my namesake, and I hate it. I know I shouldn’t complain, since I’ve been spoiled my whole life, but it sucks having one path to follow in life. At least college would add some shortcuts.
My mother walked into the room, dragging a duffel bag that bulged with clothing and shoes (each wrapped in a plastic bag, of course). She huffed and grunted before giving up and dropping it on the floor.
“ Oh,” she gasped. “Isn’t this lovely? It’s a lovely room, Patrick. Look at that view of the—what is that?”
“I think it’s the back of the dining hall.”
We watched in silence as a man pushed through the door of the dining hall, carrying a huge bucket full of—well, I wasn’t exactly sure what it was. He proceeded to dump the bucket of brown slosh into the dumpster. Then, he wiped his nose and wandered back inside.
“Well, you get a beautiful view of the sky,” she pointed out.
Ladies and gentlemen, my mother–forever the optimist. Maybe she lost her mind, or those self-motivational tapes brainwashed her, but to her, everything had a positive side. And I mean everything. Mason crashed his car into a truck a year before we started college, and instead of scolding him, my mother just shrugged. It’s just a part of growing up, she claimed. If crashing a car was a rite of passage, I decided to remain forever young.
“Well, this place sucks!” Lacey, my sister, suddenly appeared in the door, dragging more luggage from the car.
“Don’t use that language,” my mother demanded.
Lacey was right, though. Besides the horrific view and the stains, gunk covered the floor. I silently thanked my mother for forcing me to pack slippers. Lacey placed my laptop bag on the desk. Next to the bag, carved in large, deep letters, were the words “EAT ME.” Who the hell carved that into a desk that wasn’t even theirs? The concept of respect must have flown right over their head.
I tossed the backpack, which dangled on my shoulders, onto the bed. The springs squeaked from the weight. In fact, the bag sank into the mattress. I suddenly missed my Tempur-Pedic.
Mason and my father brought in the last of my luggage just Lacey and I started to unpack my duffel bag. Mason snickered as he examined the room. “You ain’t gonna survive here, Patty.”
I threw him a glare; he knew I despised the nickname ‘Pat’, so he took it a step farther. Irritating me was his favorite past time. I tried not to let him get to me, but he drove me nuts. Up a fucking tree nuts.
“I’ll be fine,” I assured him.
“I don’t know,” he grinned. “I think my closet’s bigger than this.”
My father suddenly whacked the back of Mason’s head.; the smile on Mason’s face immediately fell. My father, Patrick Miles II, dressed (that day, and every other) to fit the ‘typical Texan’ stereotype. A huge cowboy hat sat upon his balding head and a gun holster was strapped to his belt. I’m sure he could fit me and Mason on his shoulders.
Even though he granted (and yes, granted is the correct word, according to my father) me both his and my grandfather’s name, the two of us were nothing alike. While he passed the time shooting at squirrels and bunnies (whatever hunters hunted), I curled up in the armchair in my room and read until my eyes burned. If he could go back in time, I’m sure I would have been Mason Miles.
Both Mason and my father are men’s men. They hunt, they fight, they argue, they play sports. Hell, they watch sports. I barely understand football, which is a sin in the Miles household. Football bores the hell out of me. I pretend to enjoy it, for my family’s sake, but I cringe every time new stains appear on the player’s white pants. Yeah, I know it’s dumb. But why would they use white pants if they’re going to be rolling around in the dirt? It doesn’t make any sense to me.
It took about four hours to unpack and organize and re-organize the room (six times, to be exact). Finally, after switching the positions of the bed and dresser, the room opened up. It shocked me how much, in fact. My mother’s a designing genius. Miles Manor fits right in with a Homes and Garden’s house. She put a lot of time and effort into making our home perfect. Well, maybe not effort (unless you consider calling the contractors effort). With her skills, the dingy, prison-like room transformed. It took the edge off a bit; I felt a bit more at home. But those scuffs…
I used White Out to cover them. But no matter how many times I painted them over with the White Out, they managed to peak through when it dried. My mother winded up running to the hardware store and buying eggshell white paint, even though my father protested that I “man up ‘cause they’re just stains.” She ignored him and finally, the stains were concealed. When the paint dried and they remained hidden, I finally sighed with satisfaction.
“So, I guess I’ll see you guys later?” It was more of a demand than a question.
“I’m gonna miss you so much!” my mother suddenly blubbered, throwing her plump arms around me. “You’re growin’ up so fast. Come home soon, alright?”
“Whatever you say.”
I ushered them out the door, thanking them over and over for their help. My mother hiccuped one last sob before my father had to grab her arm and drag her down the hall. It was strange saying good-bye. The longest I spent away from them was when I went to New York City with my private school for a week. Don’t get me wrong, New York City is nice and all, but I was homesick as soon as I stepped off the plane. Besides, that place is dirty.
My phone buzzed in my pocket. My mother apparently texted me, reminding me (again) how much she loved me and how I shouldn’t listen to my father because he doesn’t understand.
About a week before I arrived at school, my father sat me down in his study and interrogated me to check that I was ready to leave. I assured him I would be fine, but he just laughed and bet I wouldn’t last a week. It wasn’t very encouraging at the time, but I guess that was his intention.
And when they finally left and I was finally alone, I started to wonder if he was right.
Maybe it was the silence of the room, or the fact that I didn’t have a bookshelf to hold my favorite books (instead, they were crammed on the top of my desk), but I suddenly realized how alone I felt. I was far from home, far from my comfortable bed and my perfect room. I glanced at the spot over my bed where the boot print had been. Even with the paint covering it, the fact that it was once there irked me.
If people threw their shoes at the walls in the college, I figured I would never fit in. It’s not like I fit in anywhere else, though. At prep school, I never understood the other kids. Their actions and reactions were so foreign to me. The thing is, they all liked me. They thought I was clever and funny, but I couldn’t say the same for any of them. And at home, I was always the odd one out. I never appreciated sports like my father and Mason, or understood the importance of ‘being a man’. It all seemed trivial to me. Besides, my family’s a bit snobby. They think they’re better than everyone. But I never thought like that, not me (at least, that’s what I believed when I started at Palixton).
I tossed my phone on the bed, trying to figure out what to do next. There was some freshmen orientation occurring in the dining hall, but I wasn’t in the mood. Besides, what would I learn at the orientation that I didn’t already know? I decided I would re-attempt reading the first of Ezra Pound’s cantos. Just as I reached for the book, someone pounded on the door.
I hesitated before I walked to the door and opened it. Two guys stood in the door way, grinning like idiots. They both wore cheap white t-shirts and baggy shorts. One had tufts of pale blond hair peeking out of a dirty black skull-cap. He reminded me a bit of a parrot, those annoying kind who scream the same sentence over and over, or maybe a skunk.
“Hi,” I said.
“Hey, we’re your neighbors. I’m Chris and this is Art.” Chris pointed at the blonde, who smirked as his eyes scanned me. Suddenly, an unexplainable, uncomfortable feeling bubbled in my stomach.
“I’m Patrick.” I extended my hand towards Chris, which he immediately slapped. I yanked my hand back from the shock. I know it’s some sort of guy thing to acknowledge each other by high-fiving (or whatever), but my hand stung and turned bright red.
“Wanna come play football?” Art asked. He had a strange accent, which was neither Texan or southern. I had heard the accent before, but I couldn’t place my finger where. “We’re asking everyone on the floor.”
I hesitated, glancing down at the Rolex watch strapped around my wrist and my baby blue Tommy Hilfiger polo. I definitely wasn’t dressed for football; then again, I rarely was.
“No, I think I’ll just hang out here. Thanks, though.”
“Kay. See you ’round, then.” It hit me where I heard the accent: New York City. His words weren’t drenched with the typical ‘New Yawk’ accent, but it was subtle.
Just as I went to close the door, I caught Art’s glance one last time. He threw me a small smile. The uncomfortable feeling rushed back. Maybe football wouldn’t be such a bad idea. Half of the college experience was socializing, after all.
I swung the door back opened and called out to Art and Chris. “Where are you guys going to play?”
“Right on the quad,” Chris said.
“See you in a bit then?”
Chris seemed like a decent guy. But, I found myself praying that the rest of my floor mates weren’t as odd as Art. He was from New York, after all.
I threw on something a bit more casual, which took me ten minutes of digging through clothing to find, and headed for the quad. I reassured myself over and over that football wouldn’t be so bad. After dealing with Mason’s beatings when I was younger, I could take the pain. However, I wasn’t sure how much I enjoyed the idea of getting thrown into the grass. No, actually, I was sure; I despised the idea.
Still, I found myself on the quad, facing about ten guys wearing obnoxious grins on their faces. We introduced ourselves, but most of their names slipped from my mind. Chris explained some rules, which I didn’t hear, then broke us up into teams. Guys spoke to me, and I answered, but don’t ask me what we said because, truthfully, I have no idea. The only thing I remember was the fear of getting dirty creeping up on me.
When we formed a line, I found myself facing Art,who was on the other team. At this point, the terror struck me and I felt my knees growing weak. I managed to maintain my composure (a skill I practiced over the years).
Just as the ball was passed to the quarter back, Art said, “Don’t fall.”
Apparently, they forgot to tell me it was tackle football. Art rushed at me. For such a scrawny kid, he knew how to tackle. I tried to brace myself, but the mixture of fear and his power knocked me right onto the grass. My cheek smeared against the dirt as he stumbled off me.
“Christ, aren’t Texans supposed to be all rough and tough?” he asked as he helped me up.
I could almost feel the dirt particles digging into my pores and burying themselves under my skin. I rubbed my cheek with the back of my hand, but it was no use. The panic set in and my breathing escalated.
When I was young, Mason decided it would be funny to throw me into a puddle of mud. He used to be jealous of me or something, since I got father’s name instead. So, he’d just release all his frustration on me whenever he had the chance. One night, we were on the porch, watching the storm, and (as always) Mason got bored. I guess his idea of entertainment was dragging me off the porch, down to the sopping wet lawn, and throwing me into the mud. I couldn’t fight back; he’s always been stronger than me. He held me down and I could feel all that dirt rushing up my nose and into my ears. I remember thinking I was going to go deaf. I started to cry. Hell, wouldn’t you if you were four? Then, the mud got filled my mouth up. For a half hour, he kept pushing me down and nearly drowning me. He thought it was the funniest thing in the world, watching me squirm and cry.
Needless to say, my mother grounded him for a week. I finally stopped crying when she scrubbed me clean. Even when she finished, I demanded she keep going. “You’re all clean, sweetie. You’ll be okay,” she told me over and over. But I felt the filth in all my crevices and the taste still lingered on my tongue.
I could taste it again, that bitter sensation. It clouded my mouth and I spat, missing Art’s shoe by an inch.
And then we were lining up again. I prepared myself, this time, planting my feet firmly into the ground. The quarterback grabbed the ball through his legs, and I charged towards Art. He had this shocked expression on his face as our bodies collided, but he held his ground. We wrestled as he tried to get passed me.
Then, someone fumbled and it was all over. We panted, glancing at each other. “Well shit,” he laughed, wiping the sweat dripping from his forehead.
The rest of the game, we were each others targets. I just wanted to hold my ground as he tried to knock me down, but the bastard was strong. A few times, I found myself sprawled across the grass. He always helped me up, laughing as my frustration escalated.
I finally understood why football was so intoxicating. A mixture of the adrenaline pumping through my veins and the boiling anger distracted me from my anxiety. By the end, we won the game. Art and I shook hands and laughed, but I still couldn’t bring myself to like him. And with the dirt clinging to his fingers and cheeks, he was more unappealing. Besides, I couldn’t get passed that terrible hair color.
The group split by the end of the game. I collapsed on one of the lawn chairs, studying my dirty finger nails. As the adrenaline wore off, my heart started racing for other reasons. I needed to shower. My fingers trembled as I attempted to wipe my hands on my ruined shorts (which I threw out later). No matter how intoxicating the adrenaline rush was, it wasn’t worth the after math.
“We’re gonna grab some food. You coming?” Art asked. Chris and Cameron, one of my floor mates who lived a few doors down from me, were already heading for the dining hall.
“I think I’m going to shower,” I muttered as I pushed myself off the lawn chair.
My knees suddenly grew weak and I grabbed the lawn chair for support. I needed to shower. I could almost feel Mason burying my face into the mud. Suddenly, my stomach somersaulted and I wanted to vomit.
“Come over later. We’re gonna watch a movie.”
“What movie?” I restrained my voice from cracking.
“I dunno yet, dude. See you later?”
He ran off, catching up with Chris and Cameron. I took deep breaths, but the anxiety expanded in my chest. It became difficult to breathe deeply as I headed back to the dorm. I tore my clothes off and nearly ran to the shower.
At that point, no one had used the showers yet. They still glistened in the flourescent lights. I turned the handle, sighing as the water poured down my body. I scrubbed my cheeks with face wash until they burned. Even then, I still felt the particles hiding in my pores. I held my face under the hot water, ignoring the stinging. When I was somewhat satisfied, I started on my body. The washcloth’s rough texture dug into my skin, but it felt better than the sweat and dirt. Hell, anything felt better than the sweat and dirt.
After about an hour, I finally turned the knob and dried myself off. I had broken some skin, but I was used to it at that point. I just needed to be clean.
Back in my dorm, I curled up under my covers and gazed the blank ceiling above me. Between Art and the dirt, the day wore me out. I suddenly wanted to go home, but I didn’t want my father to be right. He’s the kind of man who always thinks he’s right but rarely is. I couldn’t add to his hot-air balloon ego. Besides, classes hadn’t started yet, and they would distract me from any doubts I had.
I can’t tell you exactly why I despised Art so much. So far, he was the friendliest person I met, yet I still didn’t want anything to do with him. Maybe it was that stupid smirk he always had on his face, or his too casual appearance, I don’t know. But I couldn’t stand him.
I sank into the bed, closing my eyes. Exhaustion waved through me. At home, a typical day consisted of reading and sometimes hanging out with my best friend, Julie, who, no matter how much I love her, always manages to drive me crazy. And just like that, my first day at college ended.
Patrick Miles III vs. Morning Rituals
Nightmares plagued my childhood, ranging from getting buried alive to being trapped in a room covered in dirt. The latter kept me awake at night. At least the notion of death and a final end comforted the buried nightmare. However, I couldn’t escape that room. No matter where I put my feet or hands, dirt stuck to my skin. The dreams died down as I got older; I guess I realized how stupid they were. But that night, I found myself trapped in a room covered in dirt.
Fear cascaded through my fingers as I jolted awake, unsure where I was. As sleep’s intoxicating effects wore off, I recognized my dorm’s familiar features. the nightmare jumbled up my memory, or maybe the crushing desire to go back home disoriented me, but I forgot where I was. I scratched my arm, ignoring the anxiety building in my chest.
I grabbed my toothbrush, slid into my slippers and wandered down the hall to the bathroom. The bathroom didn’t sparkle like it had the night before. Around the showers were splotches of mud and a few strands of hair. Some people are such pigs. I wrinkled my nose, carefully avoiding the dirt strewn across the tiles. When I got to the sink, hair and odd stains clogged the drain. I couldn’t brush my teeth in something so vile. Nausea erupted in my stomach.
“Mornin’,” someone called behind me. I pivoted to face Chris.
“Morning,” I mumbled.
He joined me in the sink next to me and began to brush his teeth. I watched as his toothbrush accidentally touched the tip of the sink’s nozzle, then went right back into his mouth. The nausea escalated.
“So, we’re gonna go graf freakfast in a fit…wanna come?”
The toothbrush still dangled from his mouth as he spoke. A bit of toothpaste flew from between his lips onto the mirror in front of him. I suppressed the urge to tell him to wait until he finished brushing before he spoke.
He grinned at me as the toothpaste foamed down his lips and dribbled down his chin. I wanted to brush my teeth. I hate the taste of morning breath—who doesn’t? But I couldn’t bring myself to do it as Chris’ rabid smile faced me. White specs flew from his mouth as he vigorously scrubbed his teeth. He finally spat into the sink, washed his toothbrush, and wiped his mouth with the back of his hand.
“Come by my room after you’re done.” I couldn’t take my eyes off the white specks that Chris dotted across the mirror. Then, he smacked my back with the hand he just wiped his mouth with. The hairs on the back of my neck stood up. When he left the bathroom, I frantically peeled my shirt off, checking to see if he stained my shirt. Nothing.
I succeeded scaring myself shitless. But, that’s the price I pay for despising dirt so much. It’s not that I’m necessarily afraid of it so much, no matter how terrible it feels when it’s buried deep within my nails; it’s the purest form of disgust. And can you blame me? Dirt is disgusting.
It took a few minutes, but I mustered up the courage and brushed my teeth. My eyes kept flickering towards the hardened white marks on the mirror. Even as the toothbrush brushed passed my lips, I shivered in fear of staining my perfectly white teeth. It’s not crazy. Everyone as their dose of fear and phobias. Mine just happen to revolve around maintaining perfect order and keeping everything polished. A clean room is a happy room, after all.
And Chris and Art’s room was far from happy. Clothing leaked from their half un-packed bags and an unfinished bag of chips already lay on the table. It’s large mouth greeted me as I walked in.
“Dinin’ halls got good food, I hear,” Chris announced.
A large lump of blankets on one bed muffled something incoherent.
Strands of blonde hair peaked from the covers as Chris yanked them off the bed. Art grunted, squirming and shielding his eyes. “The hell?” he groaned.
Then, he glanced towards me. I suddenly couldn’t figure out why I accepted Chris’ offer. Nothing good would come out of Art and I attempting to be friendly. The chip bag’s mouth on Art’s desk snickered at me.
“Morning Pat,” he mumbled.
He rubbed his blood-shot eyes and glanced around the room as if uncertain where he just woke up. We headed to breakfast shortly after. Art had an uncanny ability to get ready under five minutes. In fact, I doubted he brushed his teeth.
The dining hall’s ceiling towered far above our heads, strewn with ‘Welcome Freshmen’ signs and too beautiful pillars aligning the walls. I stopped for a moment, admiring the architecture. At home I attended a church which held a resonating style. Sure, I rarely listened to the preacher much (religion and I never cooperated well; I just attended for my family’s sake), but I could examine the spectacular archways and masterful craftsmanship for hours. And us Texan men, especially those of us who understand culture, can really appreciate good craftsmanship.
“Holy crap,” Art muttered. I almost expected him to comment on the architecture. Alright, expected isn’t the best word–I hoped he would. But instead, he said: “They have pancakes.”
Those were just a few examples from all the blog posts and sections of Patrick’s story that I’ve written so far. Although I haven’t reached too far in Patrick’s story, I’m definitely satisfied with what I have so far and the character which I created. Other people seem to enjoy him, as well, which is always helpful. I thoroughly enjoyed this class and all the opportunities that Professor Torgerson provided for us. Maybe some day, Patrick’s story can be shared with the world. Until then, I’ll continue to be satisfied with writing for pure pleasure.
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